Мой первый рассказ / My first ever short story (in Russian)

Друзья, всем привет! Перед вами моя первая проба пера – короткий рассказ «Призвание».
Ссылка: https://silentpolyglot.com/true_purpose/
Возможно, он немного детский, наивный и сентиментальный. Мне очень трудно самой оценить его и хотелось бы услышать мнение со стороны.
Буду признательна за любую помощь, критику, оценки и комментарии.
Спасибо огромное!

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Hi friends! I’ve just finished my first ever short story in Russian, called A True Purpose.
Here is the link: https://silentpolyglot.com/true_purpose/
This is my first attempt at writing, so I know this story is far from perfect. It’s a little like a childrens’ book and I suspect it is not well written. But it is very difficult for me to evaluate it myself.
So I’d like to hear your thoughts on this guys. Please, read my story and let me know what do you think.
I would really appreciate all your feedback, any corrections and any advice you could give on how to improve my writing.
Thank you so much for your help!

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